Monday, September 20, 2010

Most Important Aspect of an Essay

Guide for Taking Notes from Text
From the works we’re reading, analyze examples (& their effect) of the following terms & concepts from Jago’s textbook
Diction
Figurative Language
Imagery
Syntax
Setting
POV
Theme
Symbol
Character
Plot
Tone/Mood
Sound of Poetry (rhyme, meter, form, syntax, alliteration, caesura, etc.)
Sentence types (1501)

Works to find examples in:
Their Eyes were Watching God
Pride and Prejudice
Hamlet
“Coy Mistress” (693)
“Prufrock” (1033)
Gatsby (25)
“Intro” (10)
Frost (13)
“In disgrace” (36)



Most important aspect of any essay is:


Conclusion (Adam) Alfi
Concise (Eric) B2
Intro (Tony) Eunice
Opening (Cyrus) Beatrice
Claim (Molefi) B
Thesis (David) Alfi
Thesis (Matthew Benz) D2
Thesis (Andrew D)
Intro (Brian)
Support (Liz)
Clarity (Gauri) C2
Thesis (Stefana) B
Thesis (Celine) B
Intro (Lauren) GRISELDA
Intro (Sara K) C2
Claim (Cathryn)
Examples (Alec) SAPHIRE
Specificity (Matt A) D2
Clear (Samantha) XANDER
Originality (Shanelle) D2
Fluidity (Ryan) CECILIA
Thesis (Francesco) ZELDA
Thesis (Brady)
Analysis (Sara G) p18
Simplicity (Eddie) Punching Bag
What is it for you?
Is there a clear winner?
What two factors would you list?

Sunday, September 19, 2010

After these first essays: What we'll work on

Next, Work on these
1. #1 is ideas! All but a few of us need to refine and dig deeper to say more and understand what we are saying.
2. #2 is sentences. All but a few need to learn to polish sentence level writing to make it cleaner and more concise, to eliminate careless errors, and to learn the minor rules of MLA punctuation, apostrophes for possessives, noun-pronoun agreement (reader vs. their), etc.
3. Always, and forever, students need to keep revising thesis sentences and introductions. This is where you can improve an essay the most.
4. Better titles launch us into essays with more focus and more enthusiasm. Keep working on this all year.
Pickier stuff follows:
6. Remove header from page one.
7. Eliminate passive voice.
8. Cut quotations down. Only include the parts you need.
9. Eliminate awkward phrasing.
10. Avoid floating quotations that don’t quite fit and aren’t analyzed well.
11. Avoid wordiness, which decreases communication and focus.
12. Break long paragraphs into two.
13. Always proofread! And not just to catch errors, but also to find rough writing and revise it.
14. Get the MLA parenthetical punctuation right.
15. So much more!
 
Blog Assignment (due Tue. Sept. 28)
Log on to Turnitin.com and read over the comments (not just the score).
Post a blog outlining specific areas you need to work on next time in grammar and essay writing.
Option: You may revise your first essay for new points. Only substantial revisions.

Saturday, September 18, 2010

What We've Learned So Far

What we’ve focused on so far:

• Reading Pride and Prejudice: learning plot, characters, satire vs. sarcasm, long sentences, bad dad, first impressions, how characters are introduced through narrator, gossip, action, dialogue and how each can sway the reader differently. How authors control our perceptions of different characters strategically, for a bigger purpose, of a designed pre-planned reading experience. When a reader has autonomy to decide.
• Summer Reading Their Eyes were Watching God: How Hurston introduces characters through gossip
• Annotation: why it’s important, how to do it effectively.
• Grading Rubrics that describe A vs. B writing: UC Davis, Princeton, Harvard, English IV
• Sample student essays: reading, ranking, evaluating. Determining the most important qualities of stand-out essays. Thesis? Catchy title or opening? Smooth, easy-to-follow writing? Ideas that one can grasp? Sticking to the topic without digression? Well-analyzed quotes that fit the topic?
• Introduction, Title, Thesis Statement, Topic Sentence
• Blogs for everyone
• Turnitin.com: how to use it, what it’s for besides just preventing plagiarism
• The Writing Process, from brainstorming to drafting, to revision
• Narrowing down a topic and having something to say: the first third of a college writing assignment is figuring out what to say, how to narrow the focus, how to logically deduce something based on re-reading the text.
• Writing a college-level essay. Some writing in class, most out of class on a weekend for uploading to Turnitin.com.
• A few reading quizzes.
• Classroom discussion of best essays, how characters get introduced in novels, and college admissions essays.
• Daily in-class writing in journals: less pressure, frequent writing
• Near-daily at-home writing on blogs: less pressure, frequent writing, critical thinking and analysis, sharing your writing with the world and your classmates (through the SmartBoard)
• Inititial drafts and discussions about college admissions essays: small incident, five senses, catchy opening, reveals who you are, clear writing
• Watching the fish swim randomly on the blog on the SmartBoard

What we will work on next:
• Learning from the feedback on your first essay. Blogging on your goals for your writing, including syntax and grammar errors, sentence fluidity, structure, paragraph organization, communication with the reader, development of ideas, sticking with one topic, narrowing your focus, and all the other realizations about how to improve writing.
• Much clearer diction and sentence level writing.
• Much clearer communication of (and then development of) central idea
• Practice with adverbs, semicolons, comma splices, fragments, commas, MLA format, etc.
• Frequent practice and quizzing on basic surface level rules
• Daily practice in forming an interesting claim (using poetry, fiction, college essays, quotes, etc.)
• Annotation of poetry, reading poetry, picking one line or word from a poem, forming a thesis about a poem, selecting quotes to support an argument
• Critical thinking, thinking aloud, thinking on paper, pushing your ideas, sharing your ideas, going out on a limb,
• Finish Jane Austen and discuss the book as a whole
• Test on Jane Austen
• DW Harding on comedy vs. nightmare
• Daily journal writing, daily blogging, structured paragraph writing, and frequent 3-5 page college essays
• Carol Jago’s new textbook: on literature, lit devices, composing essays, close reading, reading poetry, fiction, and drama
• Hamlet and Shakespeare: getting the plot, learning the language, an essay on how different characters are given different rhythms of language, different kinds of words, and why Shakespeare does that
• Acting out a scene of Hamlet for the class, for the camera, for learning
• Five different film versions of one scene of Hamlet

Tuesday, September 14, 2010

Pride and Prejudice Pages to Know Well

            WICKHAM AND MISS KING
98-9 Mrs. Gardiner warns Liz about Wickham
103, 105 Liz’s reactions to Miss King and Wickham
            ROSINGS with Darcy and Charlotte
109 Collins
113 Lady Catherine: Liz talks back
119 Darcy and Liz sparring
125-6 Col. Fitzwilliam: second sons can’t marry poor
            DARCY’S PROPOSAL and the AFTERMATH
129-31 Darcy’s proposal
134 Darcy’s letter of explanation
139 Liz re-reading (and re-evaluating) Darcy’s letter
141 Till this moment I never knew myself
144 Bad Dad
148 uglier hats
152 Liz’s confession
            LYDIA TO BRIGHTON?
155 lamentations resounding
156 Dad says no to Liz, yes to Lydia
159-60 Bad Dad
            AT PEMBERLEY
163 Pemberley
168 Darcy appears! How embarrassing!
174 Georgiana Darcy
180-1 Caroline Bingley gossips about Liz
            BENNET FAMILY CRISIS ABOUT LYDIA
182 Jane’s letter is a crisis
185 How Darcy reacts to Liz’s crisis.
189 Bad Dad
192 Wedding Clothes? At a time like this?
197 What does it mean to “ruin”?
199 Collin’s ‘reassurances’ are really gloating
200 Dad blames himself (for a moment)
208 Do they ever refer to sex?
            LYDIA TIES THE KNOT
212 Lydia brags about getting married
214 Lydia reveals the secret of who was at her wedding (can you guess?)
216 Bad Dad
220 Liz tortures Wickham
237ff Lady Catherine de Bourgh interrogates Liz
246 another proposal?
251 convincing Jane
254 convincing dad
255 convincing mom
Ending: Liz has her cake.

Friday, September 10, 2010

Homework till Sept. 20 (Rank essays)

Homework due by Mon. Sept. 13: 1. Read Pride and Prejudice 2. In class, begin daily journal writing in your in-class comp book. This week: Common App Essay Questions (see Sr. Rdr.) "One person with a belief is equal 99 who have only interests." Respond.


Homework due by SECOND class meeting of week: Tue Sept 14 for A/G (but Wed. for B) 1. Pride and Prejudice 2. Read and evaluate THREE sample essays from the Red Reader; Post to your blog which sample essay you like and why; Refer to specifics from the Rubrics in the Senior Reader as you explain.


Homework due by THIRD class meeting of week (Wed. Sep. 15 for G, Fri. Sep. 10 for A/B): 1. PandP 2. Read and evaluate THREE more sample essays from the Red Reader; Post to your blog about which sample essay you like best and why.


Homework due by FINAL class meeting of week (Thu. Sep. 16 for G, Fri. Sep. 10 for A/B): 1. Pride and Prejudice 2. Read and evaluate THREE more sample Pride and Prejudice essays from the Red Reader; Post to your blog.


REVISED Homework due by MON. Sept. 20 
Read and annotate Pride and Prejudice to p.220 (and be ready for a quiz)


Post to your Blog Monday (revised): Explain what, for you, is the most important aspect of a strong essay. Give concrete examples from the one best essay you’ve read in the Red Reader. Post to your blog.

Wednesday, September 8, 2010

Essays Need an Interesting Main Point!

Get to the Point!
Your essay needs an interesting main point or it will just be a series of examples. Make sure you dig deep and discover your best, most provocative idea. Write and re-write until your thesis sentence (and the sentences before it) clearly communicate your idea.

Monday, September 6, 2010

First English IV blogging assignment: Post your Thesis

1. Open your blog and on the top right of the menu bar, click on ‘New Post.’
2. Type in a title (a working title for your essay that communicates your main idea).
3. Type in a working thesis. This can approximate the actual sentence or sentences you plan to use OR in plain language it can state what the main idea of your essay is.
4. Click “SAVE.” You can EDIT your thesis by clicking on the pencil icon in the lower right.
• Make sure your thesis clearly communicates a claim or point that is debatable or controversial (not just an obvious fact, such as Austen introduces characters with foils).
• Avoid a list (especially a list of three): “Austen uses Showing, Telling, and Foils to introduce characters.”  Some examples follow:
     #1             Conflicting First Impressions
Austen employs town gossip as a method of introducing character, implanting first impressions in the reader’s head.
     #2              Different Character Introductions for Different Authors
Austen adopts the voice of the class-conscious public while Graham Greene gives open-ended impressions to let the reader decide.
      #3              The Dichotomy of Character Introductions
Austen introduces characters in two ways: first, since superficial details are of the utmost importance to her society, she supplies superficial information before the reader meets the character. Second, Austen describes the characters’ actions to set up a contrast that readers must resolve for themselves. add sentence?
  #4                     Austen Teaches Readers
By introducing Darcy and Bingley through gossip and the opinions of others, Austen creates first impressions that she will later break down, teaching readers not to prejudge anyone.
  #5                   Mr. Bennet, the Lovable Bully
Despite Bennet’s imperfections as a prudent father, his witty perceptions make him an ironically likable figure who satirizes his surrounding, lending the reader a detached perspective on Austen’s world.
  #6                  An Examination of Class and Economy through Mr. Hurst
Despite his seemingly weak presence in the novel, Hurst is the epitome of the triviality of Austen’s class-conscious aristocracy, a representative of all she satirizes. (most votes!)
   #7                How Minor Characters Help Develop Major Ones
Darcy’s basic demeanor, general façade and even integrity are continually judged by the biases of others. He is often compared negatively with others, such as Wickham and Bingley, and is rarely characterized directly by the narrator. Darcy’s multidimensional and nuanced nature is depicted by a complex cast of minor characters, who flesh out his complexities over time.
 
 Which is your favorite and why?  #6? #7
What do we expect from a title? Catchy, not interchangable, main idea
What do we expect from a thesis? Clear writing, predicts essay's point, not too wordy, direct but doesn't oversimplify